...Hidden Treasure... One day a boy named Jack was planting plants. Suddenly he hit a box. It was a treasure box. Jack shouted "Mum, Dad I found treasure". I found gold.
That was lucky Mwilwa. I would have loved to find treasure in my garden!! Well done for capital letters, full stops, commas and speech marks! What an impressive piece of writing!However,you could add an exclamation mark (!) after Jack shouts to his Mum and Dad!
My word! What a luck strike Jack had finding that treasure Mwilwa. We are very lucky too to be able to read your writing. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteThat was lucky Mwilwa. I would have loved to find treasure in my garden!! Well done for capital letters, full stops, commas and speech marks! What an impressive piece of writing!However,you could add an exclamation mark (!) after Jack shouts to his Mum and Dad!
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