Wednesday 19 June 2013

5 Sentence Challenge - Ryan

...Hidden Treasure...
Once upon a time there was a pirate.  He was sailing across the dirty sea.  He got to an island.  He saw an X so he dug and he found the hidden treasure.  In the treasure there was money and a crown and a necklace.

2 comments:

  1. Mrs Skinner (Team100)20 June 2013 at 01:32

    Sounds like my sort of treasure Ryan. I can see that you have thought very carefully about your writing. thank you for sharing it with us!

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  2. Talhaa (Team 5SC)21 June 2013 at 00:02

    Wow!I am impressed with your adjectives e.g.'He was sailing across the dirty sea.'
    Try using more sentence openers next time.

    Cheers.

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